Ending the Sins

My original ending was very bland, quick, and to the point. Although it did bring all of the aspects of my paper together it was just lacking in excitement and personality. It didn't leave the reader thinking about anything new. This conclusion just restated the same points that I make throughout my paper.

Movies tell a lot about the people that go and see them. People are intrigued by movies because they can relate to them. They are either how the viewers act, or how the viewers wish they lived their life. Going to the movie theater tells a lot about how the seven deadly sins are committed. Wrath, Sloth, Envy, Lush, Gluttony, Greed, and Pride are all committed in the movies and in the people that go to watch the movies.             

In my first new conclusion of this paper I am going to use the technique of restating the thesis of my essay. With this, the reader will be able to see the point of the essay. This technique will ensure that the paper has a conclusion that relates to the whole topic. With using this technique I would like to allow the reader to feel like the paper had a good ending. I want to ensure that it didn't end with the reader still thinking and wondering. With this new paragraph the reader can feel like I said everything I could to depict my topic.

          In all movies you will see that at least one of the seven deadly sins will be present throughout. Not only will the sin be present in the movie, but as well as in the person seeing that movie. The type of movie that a person goes to see tells a lot about their character and personality. Someone that sees a movie where the sin of greed is present, they have an aspect of greediness in the way they live their life. As I sit and watch people go into different movie theaters, I can see their lives flash before me. They can either relate to the movie, or they want to have the lives of the characters. Either way, all of the seven deadly sins are present multiple times while at the Movie Theater.


In my second new conclusion I am going to wrap up my paper in a way that the reader can learn the importance of the essay subject. I will start out by saying how the seven deadly sins are committed everyday. This will leave the reader to keep thinking about this topic and will leave an impact on the reader's life as well as conclude my paper. With this technique, I hope to achieve the reader’s acceptance. I want to make sure that the reader has learned something or that the paper has made the reader think about life in a different way. With this new conclusion the reader should feel like the topic of this paper is important and can relate to their life.

          The seven deadly sins are committed everywhere. You will see the sins gluttony, greed, sloth, wrath, envy, and pride anywhere you go. You will see them being committed at the store, in your house, at the movies, and at school. A person will present the sin of gluttony in a way where they are over indulgent, greed in a way that they will do anything to get what they want, sloth in a very boring, slow, and lazy life or personality. The person who represents wrath shows this sin in a very angry, retaliated way, envy wishing you had what others have, and pride being over confident and arrogant. All of these sins can be seen in movies shown at the movie theater as well as in the lives of the moviegoers.